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Post by danielle on May 24, 2018 4:47:23 GMT -4
Please post your feedback by replying to this thread.
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Post by obigirl on May 26, 2018 8:12:17 GMT -4
I do love a good crime story and Star Wars AND CRIME I never realised how much they go together and so well the twist and beauty with Obi Wan and Padme sad about Qui Got but yay for Padme and Obi Wan
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Post by danielle on May 26, 2018 12:16:38 GMT -4
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I wanted to do a SW crime story for awhile, I'm grateful I found the inspiration at last.
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Post by NoobianRose on May 27, 2018 0:14:08 GMT -4
Danielle! I had no idea that you were so well versed in the crime genre! I really loved seeing this mystery unfold . . . at least a little.  I thought that this was an interesting take on cannon events told in a really riveting way that DEFINITELY left me wanting more. I did think that the Obidala relationship felt like it happened a bit fast? But I LOVED that it was the Force pushing them together toward some greater, as yet unknown, purpose. If you do decide to continue this, I'd be excited to see what comes next. Well done, my friend. |
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Post by danielle on May 27, 2018 4:38:14 GMT -4
Thank you, Rosalie. I grew up on watching Joan Hickson in Miss Marple, I love Agatha Christie, but I've felt unable to replicate it.
I did rush the obidala a bit, I was trying to keep the relationship in the distance, a minor piece of the story rather than front and centre. This initial began as an epic story in my head and I was trying to condense it down. If I go back to it, I'll probably lengthen the pace of their relationship.
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Post by NoobianRose on May 27, 2018 17:02:13 GMT -4
Sounds like a plan. And I totally get that. I think you were really successful with the story! I enjoyed it!
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I thought that this was an interesting take on cannon events told in a really riveting way that DEFINITELY left me wanting more. I did think that the Obidala relationship felt like it happened a bit fast? But I LOVED that it was the Force pushing them together toward some greater, as yet unknown, purpose. If you do decide to continue this, I'd be excited to see what comes next. Well done, my friend.