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Post by danielle on Jun 25, 2015 3:43:32 GMT -4
Please click the link to read the story, and post your feedback by replying to this thread. Back to December |
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Post by Kate on Jun 27, 2015 6:31:51 GMT -4
A very sad piece, but a good one. You really captured the tension and regret between them. Well done!
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Post by danielle on Jun 27, 2015 7:00:27 GMT -4
This is so poignant, and beautifully described. You can easily picture the tension between them, I get this impression that Padmé is struggling to keep her composure as she's hears what Obi-Wan says. I can see her breaking down when she's finally alone and I'm wishing Obi-Wan would be there to comfort her.
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Post by obigirl on Jun 27, 2015 8:40:28 GMT -4
i love that song you used in the beginning such a beautiful sweet sad song and it worked so well as the theme here and you could really sense the sadness coming from Obi Wan and Padme here like they didn't want to be hurt but the love was there, beautiful work
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Post by NoobianRose on Jun 27, 2015 14:39:43 GMT -4
Oh man! There's so much Obi-Wan angst today! I don't know if my poor little heart can take it!!
This is lovely, Takianna. I particularly like the undercurrents, so much left unsaid -- even to the reader. Their feelings coming from another time and place and having no space to grow as they may wish in their current situation. It's kind of refreshing, yet still fitting, to see Obi-Wan as the one really wrestling with his feelings and longing to tell her the truth. So well done. <3
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Post by Deleted on Jun 27, 2015 15:11:06 GMT -4
Tissue warning! But so great!
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Post by Aravyn Kenobi on Jun 27, 2015 16:56:48 GMT -4
So sad!! This was beautifully written and I think Obi-Wan's regret was perfectly expressed.
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Post by Briseis on Jun 28, 2015 14:53:29 GMT -4
Oh I always wanted to vid them to this song, and now I remember why!  This is really beautiful, and so poignant. I could really feel their emotions so acutely. |
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Post by takianna on Jul 1, 2015 8:45:17 GMT -4
Briseis please do that vid!  I love this song in terms of Obidala. It's so perfect. It's so "What could have happened." Thanks for all the great feedback! |
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Post by Briseis on Jul 1, 2015 13:03:08 GMT -4
Thanks! I shall definitely do it one day  Me too, I totally agree. You are most welcome. |
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This is really beautiful, and so poignant. I could really feel their emotions so acutely. 
I love this song in terms of Obidala. It's so perfect. It's so "What could have happened." Thanks for all the great feedback!
Me too, I totally agree. You are most welcome.